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Stuck Between A Rock And A Hard Place

Stuck Between A Rock And A Hard Place

Posted February 14th, 2012 by Harley246

by Kristyn
in North Island

Chapter 1

 

 


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CC: You move too fast, and

CC: You move too fast, and make a new paragraph every time someone new speaks or a new idea comes up. More description and punctuation would be lovely also.

I can't wait to see where this goes! This sound very interesting, it just needs some polishing up a bit. :)

~ If aliens are looking for intelligent life, Earth shouldn't be scared.~ Flat Soda. Just trying to get me breathing again….Oh shit! I wasn’t breathing!~FMD

Posted by Saphira(Rockshadow) on Tue, 02/14/2012 - 23:30
Great job!!!! Nice detail,

Great job!!!! Nice detail, and the only mistakes I caught were the paragraph formats but other than that, AMAZING!

 

Some say the skys the limit. So tell me why there's footprints on the moon?

Posted by <~Calla~> on Tue, 02/14/2012 - 23:31
That was really good!!! I

That was really good!!! I can't wait to see what happens next!!!

Posted by CamiBeth on Tue, 02/14/2012 - 23:56
nice!i just feel like it

nice!i just feel like it reads too fast but I would like to see what is next. There r a few errors with puncuation and paragraphs

Posted by Aida on Wed, 02/15/2012 - 03:36
Thanks for your comments

Thanks for your comments they really helped me fix some of my work

more editing to come smiley

Posted by Kristyn on Wed, 02/22/2012 - 16:02

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