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Black hair, Green eyes Chapter 1 part 1 COMMENT!

Black hair, Green eyes Chapter 1 part 1 COMMENT!

Posted February 25th, 2011 by HaleyJ

by ~Haley :)~
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Dogs. I like dogs, but I hate walking them! I had just moved into a new neighborhood, and i allready had a friend. Her name was Lala.

She had blonde hair and blue eyes. She was nice.

I threw on a t-shirt and jeans, and threw my hair into a pony tail. I had to take the dog on a walk.

The sun felt warm outside. The neighbors were busy with things like yard work.

I was walking along when my heart pretty much stopped!

A boy about my age was walking. He had black hair and amazing green eyes! He was goregoes! Oh my god, why now when I looked terrible?

He stopped texting and put his cellphone in his pocket. That's when he saw me! His green eyes lit up. "Hi," he said a little nervously.

"Hey," I said I was shaking all over.

"Did you just move here?" he said with a smile.

"Umm.. yeah" I said shyly.

"Oh thats cool! my name Tristen"He said.

"Megen" I awnsered. I retardly reached out and shook his hand. he held it for a few moments then let it go.

"Uhh..yeah" he said.

"Can I ask you somthing?" he said serius.

"Uhh.. sure" I said feeling hot all over.

"Has anybody told you that you were Buetifull?"

 

My mouth dropped. If I thought I felt hot before then I was wrong, becuase I felt like I was going to faint. 

 


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Posted by Clover on Fri, 02/25/2011 - 20:51
Thanks!! I love when poeple

Thanks!! I love when poeple comment!

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Posted by Haley on Fri, 02/25/2011 - 20:55
:) "Live out all your crazy

:)

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Posted by Peppermint on Fri, 02/25/2011 - 20:52
Lol, this little meeting

Lol, this little meeting between them is so cute! Tristen sounds like a nice guy... I've always had a thing for guys with black hair and green eyes. Not that I've met anyone fitting that description, though.

Great story! Keep it up!

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Posted by Leloo on Fri, 02/25/2011 - 20:52
HAHA! Thanks! I do too i

HAHA! Thanks! I do too i have never even much guys like that.. Oh well!

 

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Posted by Haley on Fri, 02/25/2011 - 20:56
Aw... this is cute! Not in

Aw... this is cute! Not in the annoying way adults say it, like when you sew a sock monkey and your mom goes, "aw, that's cute!" I mean, like, cool cute! There are a couple spelling errors, but I like their meeting a lot!

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Posted by Miss Maple on Fri, 02/25/2011 - 20:57
Thanks! I don't go to public

Thanks! I don't go to public school so i don't know how it is so i decided to just do this!

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Posted by Haley on Fri, 02/25/2011 - 20:59
OMLS, Miss Maple, your sig

OMLS, Miss Maple, your sig describes my LIFE!

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Posted by Peppermint on Fri, 02/25/2011 - 20:59
Hey how do i go and post the

Hey how do i go and post the next chapter becuase id did it in book page or chapter i want to do chapter 2 now what?

 

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Posted by Haley on Fri, 02/25/2011 - 21:04
Is this chapter posted as a

Is this chapter posted as a "story", or a "book page or chapter"? If it's a chapter, scroll over the "write stories" tab, click on "book page or chapter", then change the drop-down bar under "Parent:" (which will say "<New Book>") to the previous chapter. Then type the next chapter in the textbox provided.

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Posted by Leloo on Fri, 02/25/2011 - 21:12
Okay thanks! Check out my

Okay thanks!

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Posted by Haley on Fri, 02/25/2011 - 21:15
That's really really

That's really really really  really  really   really   really  really  good. It's awesome!!!!

 

Marie

 

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Posted by Marie on Fri, 02/25/2011 - 21:07
Aww.. Thanks! Check out my

Aww.. Thanks!

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Posted by Haley on Fri, 02/25/2011 - 21:11
Cool and cute! If you need

Cool and cute! If you need someone to proofread, please ask me! :)

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Posted by Claire (~CRK) on Sat, 02/26/2011 - 09:55
Okay good to know :D Check

Okay good to know :D

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Posted by Haley on Sat, 02/26/2011 - 12:19
Good job. I liked it.

Good job. I liked it. Although, that first sentence about dogs seemed kind of out of place.

Posted by Evyn on Wed, 03/09/2011 - 20:56
Yeah, I forgot to mention
Posted by Haley on Thu, 03/10/2011 - 11:27
This is really good! I have

This is really good! I have a little CC. Maybe try making this a little longer and more descriptive! Other than that, this is awesome! Oh and when someone talks press the enter button. For example:

"Hi, my name is Amber!" I said, as I shook his hand.

He smiled.

"My name is Louis!"

You know what I mean? I hope that helps! Again, great job!

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Posted by NightOwl0_0 (IM... on Sat, 04/23/2011 - 18:52
Thank you so much! Yeah I

Thank you so much! Yeah I wrote this when I firt started so I was not as good at grammer corrections and stuff like that.

 

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Posted by Haley :) on Sat, 04/23/2011 - 20:08
u no wht i hate my

u no wht i hate my phone

but love this!! :) there r a couple typos but its really good start im off to read chappie 1 part 2
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Posted by Mysty (LoSt) (I... on Sun, 04/24/2011 - 10:17
Thanks!   Read this and

Thanks!

 

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Posted by Haley :) on Mon, 04/25/2011 - 10:19
Wow! This is really good!

Wow! This is really good!

Posted by Amy on Tue, 04/26/2011 - 01:58
Thanks!   Were all insane

Thanks!

 

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Posted by ~ Haley :)~ on Tue, 04/26/2011 - 10:48
OMG I LOVE THIS!!!  THIS IS

OMG I LOVE THIS!!!  THIS IS ONE OF THE CUTEST THINGS I'VE EVER READ!!!!

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Posted by ForeverMyDraco on Wed, 04/27/2011 - 15:28
Thank you :D

Thank you :D

Posted by ~Haley :)~ on Thu, 05/05/2011 - 21:12
Wow! This is very good! Some

Wow! This is very good! Some CC is to work on the grammar. But everything else is great!

Posted by Lily09 on Thu, 05/05/2011 - 21:04
Yeah I wrote this when I

Yeah I wrote this when I first joined and I was not as good at granmer and all that. But thanks!

Posted by ~Haley :)~ on Thu, 05/05/2011 - 21:12
Guess

Guess what?

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I Love This!!!!

 

 

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Posted by horselover2 on Mon, 05/30/2011 - 07:59
Thank you so much!!!!! The

Thank you so much!!!!! The book gets better as you go becauseI wrote the first few when I was not very good at writing.

 

 

 

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Posted by ~Haley~ on Mon, 05/30/2011 - 09:42
Hey Haley!!! Remember me?!

Hey Haley!!! Remember me?! :P I can't believe I just found this! Me is gonna go read more now!

 

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Posted by Maiven on Thu, 08/18/2011 - 12:23
 Hey!! How could I forget

 Hey!! How could I forget you??@!! Thanks so much :) Glad you like!

Posted by ~Haley :)~ on Fri, 08/19/2011 - 23:00
I go back and read the first

I go back and read the first chapter and look at how far we've come with the story! :D (Even though this chapter is one of my favorite out of all of them, because it's the root of the story.) Again, love it! :D

 

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Posted by Mockingjay on Thu, 08/25/2011 - 11:07
Awe thanks! I know we've

Awe thanks! I know we've come so far it's awesome, once we get done with this we should write another book together, and you can post the chapters this time :)

Posted by ~Haley :)~ on Thu, 08/25/2011 - 11:52
You're welcome. :) And yeah,

You're welcome. :) And yeah, but I'm going to be sad to see BHGE go. :(

 

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Posted by Mockingjay on Thu, 08/25/2011 - 18:34
Yeah me too. It's so fun!

Yeah me too. It's so fun!

Posted by ~Haley :)~ on Fri, 08/26/2011 - 15:16

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