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Broken Heart chapter 12

Broken Heart chapter 12

by Nerdfighter_Gra3ce
in someplace that is a place? Idk, why do you wanna know?

A.N. I don't know how good this is so... Yeah umm. Ahem. Anywho on with the story. Tell me if it's good or not.

I watched disgusted as Jeremy kissed Hanna. I turned around and watched as the two officers, that I could still see, walked down the mountain. I felt a slight tape on my shoulder and turned around. Jeremy's faced was hovering inches from mine. I backed away and tried to seem like I didn't notice that tiny detail. I had goosebumps running up my arms. I looked down trying to cover my blush. Hanna trotted up behind Jeremy and giggled like a little school girl. I wanted to smack her but I restrained myself. I had slight anger problems and I didn't want to show Jeremy them. Not when he didn't know about them. Well he might have accutally. But I wasn't going to let it be known now. Jeremy turned around and his lips met Hanna's again. He pulled away and turned to face me. "Hey... I think what you did was pretty awsome."
I nodded sadly. He saw that I wasn't excited "What's wrong?"
"Nothing." I muttered.
But he could see right thew me. "Yes something is wrong and you will tell me what it is."
I shook my head.
"Come on, Zoe." Jeremy insisted.
I decided queitly that I would tell Jeremy. But I wasn't going to tell Hanna. That would make her sad that she had hurt me. Like I said earlier. I didn't want her to be sad. I pulled Jeremy into the trees and said "I don't want Hanna to get sad. Or dissapointed. If she heard what I'm about to tell you then she would be devestated."
Jeremy moved closer to me but I backed up and said "The reason I was so... sad. And angrey is cuase I like you. I mean really like you. More then just a freind like."
Jeremy looked at me with his mouth open. He stuttered "I-I-I did-nt- didn't know. Why didn't you tell me this?" He wondered.
I turned my back to him "Cause I don't want to ruin your relashonship with Hanna."
I felt tears welling up in my eyes. But I didn't want to cry. Jeremy sensed my unhappiness and moved closer to me. He put his arms around me in a hug. I did the same to him as tears started to roll down my cheeks.

Jeremy was sitting down next to me under a tree. I had stopped crying but I still felt like I was. I heard Jeremy mutter "I wish I could heal your heart. I wish that I could make you forget that you ever saw Hanna and I together like that. Then we wouldn't be in this mess."
I looked up at him. "No don't say that. I don't mind having my heart broken if it's for Hanna."
I was so close to crying agian. It was a lie. A complete and total lie. Jeremy said "You're lying Zoe. Don't lie to me."
I looked into his eyes and said "If I never lied to you then your mind would be full of more hurt then you ever knew."
In a pretty obcvious attempt to change the subject Jeremy said "You thought up a pretty good plan to get rid of the officers."
I looked at him skepticcly and retorted "It wasn't that good."
Jeremy looked flabbergasted. "What are you talking about? Using all the elements together? Genious."
I didn't think so. "No. No it wasn't."
Jeremy was about to say something when we both heard a heart stopping scream.

A.N. Ok so I had to stop cause I wanted to leave a cliffhanger and I have to get off my computer now. I might edit this tommrow. I don't think it's that good so comment on what you think.


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no offense, but the idea of

no offense, but the idea of jeremy and hanna is just wrong. Its annoying to.. i mean it just doesnt fitt. anybody agree??

Posted by Danielle on Mon, 08/30/2010 - 20:32
Hmm.... I don't think Jeremy

Hmm.... I don't think Jeremy and Hanna together is WRONG, I just think they don't really suit each other. Jeremy's all rugged and mysterious, while Hanna is innocent and sweet. But I think it makes a better story. Zoe never expected them to be together, so it was that much more devestating when she realized they were.

Of course, Zoe and Jeremy just HAVE to get together eventually... since they suit each other so well and all...

I really liked the chapter, btw, Grace. So don't beat yourself up. :)

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Posted by Tasha on Mon, 08/30/2010 - 21:23
Maybe to make Jeremy and

Maybe to make Jeremy and Hanna fit you should change Hanna's personality a little. Maybe make her have an expeirence in chapter 13 that changes her. Makes her Jeremy's type or whatever. That'll give him a harder choice. BUT AMAZING CHAPTER! YAYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYY!

 

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Posted by Kyle on Tue, 08/31/2010 - 08:35
I don't know. I think they

I don't know. I think they sorta fit in an unexpected way. You know, opposites attract and all that.

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Posted by Tasha on Tue, 08/31/2010 - 11:29
You guys will just have to

You guys will just have to find out what happens. And I know that Hanna and Jeremy don't fit. Why do you think I choose them? And there might be a life altering thingy or whatever but not in chapter thirteen. It's going to be in chapter 14. I still don't think this was a good chapter.

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Posted by Grace on Tue, 08/31/2010 - 16:56
I DONT KNOW IF THEY HEARD A

I DONT KNOW IF THEY HEARD A HEART FAULTERING SCREAM BUT MY PARENTS JUST DID. AND IT CAME FROM ME! OMG OMG OMG OMG! I LOVE THIS! AMAZING!!! AHHH!!! SHE TOLD HIM!!! AHH!!!!!! WHAT IS GUNNA HAPPEN!!! *tries to breath* *fails* MOOOOOOOOOOORRRRRREEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

 

 

~Kay

Posted by Kay on Tue, 08/31/2010 - 19:34


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