...............I don't even.........just........What Is This?......just read it.
Posted March 6th, 2013 by BearWithAStrawberry
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i'm not all that pretty; i'm not all that perfect; in not all that happy; goodbye in the limelight, filming episode 800 of something that will be premiered on ABC, FOX, and all the news stations. Watch it! (naw, but I'm working towards it!! keepy it up!) Imma win an Oscar! Remember me when I'm famous! :D /le cheesy star smile/ WHUUUUTTTT |
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A/N: coughcoughcough no message here cough
Unedited. Feast on the hideousness.
Please don’t try to comfort me.
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Pain.
That one, simple, plain word slices like a knife down your throat.
Pain.
I like pain.
I feels like a drop of caramel, slowly melting into my body.
I like pain best in the silence of night, when my only witnesses are blood and the moon.
I relish a bittersweet dizzy feel.
I love the cold that tingles up my spine.
I like the pain that shoots through my body.
No pity, no dirty looks, no mirrors…..
That’s the way I like it.
No heat, no shorts, no sun…..delightful.
No sneers, no snickers, no therapists….
wouldn’t that be nice?
Pain, darkness, hesitation….isn’t that perfect?
But the question is why.
Why
Do there have to be imperfections?
Why do there have to be butterflies on our arms?
Why
Are there slammed doors, drawn curtains and shattered glass?
Why
Are there bruises and scratches.
Because there is pain. There are tears, and there are razor-sharp objects. Because we have feelings, because we aren’t made of marble. Because.
Pain makes us miserable.
I’m different.
Pain.
The feel enlightens my very soul. Like a fresh tub of ice-cream on a hot day, sitting next to tortured others.
Pain.
Hurt.
Enjoy.
A/N 2: this is not a poem. the formatting just happens to be like this.
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Well-written, artful, somewhat masochistic, very well done. I very much love the mood that you gave this... sort of a rebellion to the world as we know it and how we view pain and emotional suffering. :) It was nice seeing emotions like this conveyed in a mature, creative way like this. :) Thank you for posting!
~~There's no Canada like French Canada, it's the best Canada in the land~~
thank you very much, Sandy.
it means alot to me that you would read and comment on my work.
thank you.
and yes, i am somewhat masochistic.
the sweet regret of getting punished......
not a big fan on the title you used to get people's attention, (i don't really like profanity, whether you spell it right or not, or even if your say it in another language, i find it rude and ugly, {unless of course you get scared...then its understandable}) But otherwise your poem is really good.
"Not stealing, just borrowing with intent to keep" ~Paelen from Pegasus
"I used to like math, then it turned into algebra." ~ Me
"I am more than you ever imagine" ~Iris
I need a good name for my book but can't decide! Help me choose!http://www.kidpub.com/poll/i-need-name-book-i-am-writing-which-one-sounds-more-catchy-2437135492 .
It was not used to get other people's attention.
It's called a title.
No, it is not a poem.
thanks, you made me feel a whole lot better about what i'm going through.1. I wasn't trying to be rude.
2. I am well aware of what it is...
3. I am entitled to my opinion just as much as you are.
4. Whether it is a poem or not, I like it.
"Not stealing, just borrowing with intent to keep" ~Paelen from Pegasus
"I used to like math, then it turned into algebra." ~ Me
"I am more than you could ever imagine" ~Iris
/le slow clap/
Quite a debater, are you not?
yes actually i am...I guess that would make me good in politics, if i ever get into them, still leaning in on the vet job.
"Not stealing, just borrowing with intent to keep" ~Paelen from Pegasus
"I used to like math, then it turned into algebra." ~ Me
"I am more than you could ever imagine" ~Iris
Heh.
I was forced against my will to debating class.
-_-
don'task
Overall, this is a beauitful piece of writing. The darkness that peek between words is quite well-written, and the descriptions give a nice visual that paints a picture in the mind. You have great writing skills. I do, however, hope that you're okay.
~~Hey you; get off of my cloud~~
yeah, thanks :)
i hope i'm okay too.
Oh my gosh.
Okay, I feel strangely drawn to this. I feel a milder form of this piece (not calling it a poem. :3), and you wrote it very well, with just a few sentences telling a dark tale. Faving. And if this is about you, I hope you're okay. You're an excellent writer, by the way.
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Ever wanted to get sucked into a book?
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:).
it is about me, but thank you, Sravani.
you're the best!
I am sorry, but I must agree with some other kidpubbers. The title is not very appealing.
So if I punch myself and it hurts, does that mean that I am really strong, or really weak?
sure, i appreciate CC, but this isn't constructive.
if you don't have anything nice to say, don't.
it's my story, is it not?
i'd appreciate a good dose of sarcasm and critisism, but there's got to be a real meaning on the side.
What's this supposed to mean?
I love the words. How they all are meant to be together, it's like you were just the right person to write this... piece. It's like it's directly from your thoughts. Which, I suppose, it probably is. I like the simplicity of some of the lines and how they blend with some of the lengthy lines. I love this. I have favourited it (I did it before I commented :3 ) and I think it's really wonderful. I'm really glad you decided to post this, in a way, because it does tell a lot about you, whether you meant it to or not. It shows you're strong, but you feel like you're weak but it also shows that you aren't cruel, and you have a sensitive side. Maybe people miss that sensitive side and that's what makes you feel this way. Although the title wasn't exactly perfect for a kid's website, it did draw me in and it did make me want to know what's the matter or what has happened, again whether you meant it or not. I also found it interesting how you referred to Summer on more than one occasion. It makes me wonder whether you love it, despise it, or it's just the fact that that is the season you are in. Aside from all this, I hope you are okay. I won't try (and probably fail) to soothe you, if that's what you wish. But if you need to say anything, I'm here, 'kay?
~evasong
"As long as my face is on page one, I don't care what they say about me on page seventeen." ~ Mick Jagger
Thank you.
Thank you for being there for me :)
I changed the title btw.
my.......creativity isn't appreciated. :/
While the title isn't my favorite, I really love this piece. It's dark, very descriptive, and emotional. Awesome! Two thumbs up!
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Thank you.
haha.
two thumbs up back to you!
Thank you guys for all the nice /coughonlysomecoughcough/ comments.
i now have a new pen-name!
mwahaha!
Never gonna give you up Never gonna let you down Never gonna run around and desert you Never gonna make you cry Never gonna say goodbye Never gonna tell a lie and hurt you
i now have a new pen-name!
mwahaha!
Never gonna give you up Never gonna let you down Never gonna run around and desert you Never gonna make you cry Never gonna say goodbye Never gonna tell a lie and hurt you
They aren't being mean. Thery are only telling their opinion that they don't like the title.
Do you hear the people sing? Lost in the valley of the night It is the music of a people who are climbing to the light For the wretched of the earth There is a flame that never dies Even the darkest nights will end and the sun will rise -Les Mi