Fading Prologue (Rough Draft) (CC APPRECIATED!)
in My daydreams, thinking of Toph kicking Di-Lee agents butts to save me from falling off a cliff. Oh Toph! :D
Dissappearing. Enchanting. Deceptive. Powerful. Beautiful. So many words to describe the amulet. And all were true. And it was fading. All of the beauty, all of the captivity, all of the addiction. Broken. Gone. Fading. Blackness. Eternally. Forever. I need to reach my hand out, but I know my attempts are futile. But still, I find my frail tan hand reaching out for the sparkling blue beauty, the queen of the ocean, the object that had decieved the world. And now, even after all the death, destruction and fading, everything all depended on me – should I find a way to save the amulet? Or should I allow the world to be balanced again? But what if it isn’t the best thing for me? I am terminal after all. The fading of myself is coming – two months. With the amulet I can be safe. Whole. But what to do? Who to save – myself, or the rest of the world? Who was more important? And who did care really, if nobody knew that I took it? Maybe just for a day or two . . . just for several more days time until my fading. Until the world realizes it’s gone. Until everyone begins to suspect that a finger of blame should be placed. Until everyone points it at me. Until someone dies . . .
A/N: Okay, so I decided to post this. PLEASE ONLY GIVE ME CC! OR AT LEAST TRY! I find this slightly confusing and can’t wait to edit Fading! Like I said, ROUGH DRAFT! I’ll need all the CC I can get so I don’t write a crappy edited version. Plus, it’ll make more sense after the next few chapters – trust me!
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!!! I LOVE this, kyle! I can think of no cc to give you! :D
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well the words "
Broken. Gone. Fading. Blackness. Eternally. Forever
kinda seem weird....theres too many...it sounds weird for the last two..
K thanks! Like I said, I think it's confusing.
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Whoa---awesome! However, in my prologues, I like to add an element of action.... So you could add that the ground was shaking beneath you or something: It draws people in.
AND I LOOOOOOOOOVE IT!
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Hmm. I don't know if I'd delete both of the last two, but I'd delete one of them. Because, basically, they're synonyms. But the idea itself (one way or another) seems important. Like, the reader needs to know it's forever, but they don't need to know twice.
Anyway, wonderful!
Please get the next chapter out soon. I'm dying and that was just the prolouge. I promise, I 'll comment on EVERY chapter.
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