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journal of a wolf chapter 1 the intro

journal of a wolf chapter 1 the intro

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by stellar dragon
in Texas




This is a story about a world called Wolverote. Were only anthropomorphic wolves live big and small, different races and different colors.Also islands dot this world ,continets,countries, and ice worlds ,but the biggest by far is the country shaped like a wolf head called Wolfera were all the races of wolf live in somewhat harmony with each other. Oh I almost forgot all the wolves are broken up into clans ok so lets stop beating around the bush.

This is the story about Zarach a young 13 year old male wolf and his sister Fay a young 18 year old female wolf as they go on an adventure but let me tell you about each one individualy ok? Whatever I'm in control so ok

Well Zarach is a not such a brave guy at all and he can be a tad nervous. His dream is to figure out how to join the clans together, but he has a secret goal he wants to impress a mate by becoming the ultimate clan leader. Now to fay.

Well to began she is the opposite of zarach shes brave and calm but she shares zarach's dreams, both of his dreams, but she is also the favorite of the pack and guardian to zarach. Amagine trying to keep a trouble making 13-year old out of trouble then you have barely understood what she has to go through.

There a basicaly 12 clans.

But for now I will tell you the 3 most important clans.

Vanguard the one that fay and zarach belong to and the biggest,

Guru smart and intelligent black wolves only here,

and finaly Sorrent but they should be called sorry they are weak and stupid.

Oh and another thing, it is a rare thing for the clans to agree. They always fight they even have tournaments.Alright lets get started

“yaaaaaawwwwn” said Zarach as he got up and stretched from his evening nap” when do we go hunting big sis?”he asked

”who said you were coming”said Fay sharply

“ oh ok I will stay here and do nothing”

“I didn’t say you were going to do nothing you are going to gather berries”

“aaaaaaaawwwww! Really”he said sadly

“really”she said”I don’t see whats so bad we its not that scary”

“yes it is being all alone in the forest were the dire wolves live”he said smugly”come on I want to hunt pleaaaaaseeeee”

“no!”she said infuriated

“why!?”

“because I said so”then she turned and walked off

“GGGGGRRRRRR!”he growled then he thought to himself(she is so tiresome always thinking she is so high and mighty) he sighed and trudged of

A little later Fay left to go hunt but wait whats that behind her its zarach oops!

“Zaaaaarrrrraaaacccchhhh! I cannot believe you followed me again gggggrrrrrrrrr!Go home now”

“make me nah nah boo boo” taunted Zarach with his tongue stuck out.

“can’t even keep your brother in tow tsk tsk” said a random wolf

“shut up!...whatever I’m taking him home bring me something good or else”said Fay

So the other wolves walked off

“What were you thinking that was completely stupid zarach! How could you”

“I’m sorry I now I shouldn’t have but that ain’t cool just leaving me like that. Mom would never do that”

“don’t you dare use mom against me you never even knew her!”

“neither did you!!!!!”screamed Zarach

This was true there mom and dad had died and left them with the oldest wolf in the clan and now he to is dead ya its sad but lets get back to the story oh and sorry Zarach.

“I just now she wouldn’t do that ok” he said unsure

“no she wouldn’t and I’m sorry”

“….fine”

“,fine, that’s all I get”

“no... I forgive you”

Its been an hour since Zarach and Fay’s fight and its night.

“Zarach I need to talk to you”

“ok whatever you say” said Zarach

So they walked a ways into the woods when Zarach noticed sFay was being quiet so he started the conversation

“hey what I said about mom earlier”

“forget it”

“but that’s the thing I can’t”

“what do you mean”said Fay confused

“I don’t know its weird”he said as he shuffled and rubbed his head thinking A habit he had adopted after the old wolf died" its like I feel like what I said made me remember a picture of mom"

Just incase your wondering how they now what their mom looks like the old wolf has a painting

“…Lucky. I’ve tried to remember what I saw as a child but I can’t and here you are you can remember just because of something said”She said then sniffed and started to gently cry zarach walked over to comfort her

“Its alright calm down I only remember a picture I can paint it for you”

This is also true zarach is a wonderful painter.

“Really you can I mean you’d do that..for me?”

“sure you are my sister and I love you as such”said Zarach then he hugged her

“ok love you to doofus” said fay

Then they walked back to the village to eat

And eventually go to sleep

“zzzzzzzzzzz"

“zarach wake up”
“zarach wake up”

ZZZZZZZZZZZZZ!

“ZARACH WAKE UP!”

“what! what! what happened!” he said as he fell out of bed

“hahahahahahahaHAHAHAHAHA!!!!! Woooooohooo that was funnnnyyyy woo”

“not cool man uhh girl, thing”he thought for a minute”oh I know doofus ya that’s what you are”

“what ever… Anyways I woke you up to say I heard something go look outside the tent”

“ fine whatever”he walked out of the tent”I can’t see very good but somethi-hey what are yo- elp e”

“zarach this better not be a prank”she said with a shaky voice”zarach..zarach!. zarach!!”

She burst through the flap to find utter chaos

There was a battle and her brother was in the middle of it although this was not an unusual sight in their village it never happened this way but this is bad her brother is in trouble what are we going to do oh what are we going to do

“hey narrator dood shut up”

Ok fine just help zarach

“stop it”

They kept fighting

“stop it!”

Still they did not stop

“STOP IT”
“STOP IT!”
“STOP IT!!”

Finally they stop

“what are you doing to my brother”

Instantly they dropped them

“nothing just ruffing him up a bit”
then she noticed they were scared of her so she growled and they ran away
then she walked over to her brother to look and gasped terrified

 


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It's okay; I mean, the plot

It's okay; I mean, the plot and background suff was creative and intresting but chapter one...I don't know how to say it, but I really disliked the constant sound effects and I would love to see more discription in there. And they part about him cleaning the bathroom...I didn't care for it much. I love wolves and write about them a lot and you know what they say about practice so I don't know if I'm just being harsh but the sound effect and how amny there was like "zzzzzzzzz" really irked me for some reason. He actual writing style is good and I like how you don't use the word "said" a lot. But it was also hard to read when there were sooooooo many grammar errors; like' a TON. So if you havn't edited I understand and you can go back and edit when you finish but please pay more attention to that in future chapters, okay? Alright, so in all it was a nice length with an intresting background info and stuff but grammar mistakes and sound ffects need some work. Okay, happy writing!

*{I keep trying to kidnap Jasper, but every time, Alice is at the window with a baseball bat, waiting for me. How does she kn--ohh, right.}*

Posted by WolfWriter on Tue, 08/31/2010 - 09:12
One more thing, by the way.

One more thing, by the way. Thirsteen is SUPER old for o wolf. They only live 10 years at the most. About three would be the immature teenage stage for the wolves in this story

*{I keep trying to kidnap Jasper, but every time, Alice is at the window with a baseball bat, waiting for me. How does she kn--ohh, right.}*

Posted by WolfWriter on Tue, 08/31/2010 - 09:16
they are anthropomorphic

they are anthropomorphic wolves so they live as long as humans as to the sound effects I fix it but what kind of grammar mistakes were there can you tell me?

Posted by Ethan on Tue, 08/31/2010 - 10:48


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