My Brother Saved Me

My Brother Saved Me
by Victoria

Once my brother Paul save me from falling into a sewer. I opened the car door and I didn't know it was next to the sewer so I went out the door and my foot got cought into the sewer and I yelled "HELP ME" and my brother Paul ran and pulled me out. I was only 4 years old at the time and I never knew hot to repay him. I't was the happiest day of my life The End (Comment)

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If I fell in the sewer I'd

If I fell in the sewer I'd be thankful too. Nice story. A bit repitive. Try gutter and other words like that.

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Cute story. I would suggest

Cute story. I would suggest trying a little more detail. Good Job :]


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