Kati

Hey, your revised prologue is good, but one part confuses me:

With open eyes, the girl realised the boy was her sister. He had helped her dispose of the sword safely.

Do you mean he was her brother, or she was his sister? Or do you mean the boy was her sister disguised as a boy?

I think you mean she was his sister, you might want to change that.
Sorry 'bout that, but the the rest of it is good, great even. I still like it.

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☼Lauren