The Boyfriend/Girlfriend Story... Very sad... Made me cry... READ!
Posted April 11th, 2009 by SpLiNtEr
in hogwarts school of witchcraft and wizardry.
April 11th, 2009
One day when boy and girl just finished their date, the girl went home and her boyfriend called her.
"Hey baby, how are you?" he said.
"Good," she moaned.
"You don't sound good."
"I'm fine."
"I'll call tomorrow to check up on you. 'Kay?"
"Alright. Bye."
"Bye."
And when they hung up, the girl and her dad went to sleep. The boy stayed up all night and thought deeply about his sweet girlfriend. When it was about ten o'clock in the morning, the girl called her boyfriend. She called him and asked him if she could stay at his house for the night. He said okay and at five o'clock, she arrived at her boyfriend's house. Now I know what you're thinking, the boyfriend does not abuse her. The boyfriend loves her more than his own mother. So he asks her, "What's up with you today? You're so quiet. So solemn. What's wrong?"
"Nothing. It's nothing. You know what? I'm gonna go home now. I didn't mean to waste your time. Sorry. I'm going home."
"I'll walk you home."
"Okay."
So the boyfriend walked her home and kissed her on the cheek and left her to go inside her house. Her checked up on her when she went in the house and if she peeked in the window. She did, but with someone familiar. She didn't cheat on her boyfriend. But it was her abusive father trying to push her out of her bedroom window with a stick.
He ran back home without looking back and texted her to her cellphone: what's up wit ur dad? She didn't text back. So he called her and the answering machine picked it up. "I wonder what's up with her dad? And why is she not picking up?" The next day at school, the girl gave him a note.
"Don't you dare read it until I tell you to." she said.
"I promise, baby."
He stuck it inside his pocket, not daring himself to read it. After school, the girl's father picked her up in his dirty, old pick-up truck. While the boy walked home with his buddies. But what was going to happen next, was going to turn the boy's life upside down. His cellphone rang. The ID read General Hospital.
"Hello?" he said.
"Yes, I'm from the ER department, do you know a Miss Miranda Dogherty?"
"Yes, of course she's my girlfriend why? What's wrong with her?"
"I'm very sorry, but your girlfriend is no longer here with us."
He choked back tears and sobbed into the phone.
"How did she?"
"She died from sexual abuse by her father. She's covered in bruises, cuts and scrapes."
"And her father?"
"Consequences, she told me that before she went to tell you to read some kind of note?"
"The note!"
"Well, thank you for your time."
"Thanks."
They hung up and he pulled the note from his beloved girlfriend. It said:
Dearest Danny,
I loved you with all of my heart and wanted to say this, I have been sexually abused and harrassed by my own father. That is why I didn't want to sleep at your house. I love you very much. And Danny, please don't forget me and always keep me in your heart. Forever and Always,
MiRaNdA dOuGhErTy
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Aww...that's so sad!
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that's sad :(
Whoa...well, I liked the story but I think you need to work at it a bit
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That's super sad.
My tummy started hurting when I read that she died, I almost cried, sirecly, I do that a lot, but I don't mind, oh man was that sad, why did she die of an abuse, she should have just ran away or just lay there and pretend she was hurt very bad she couldn't talk, but why die! I don't know what the author was thinking about that but I don't know I mean wow
I'm not one to cry, but this is really sad!
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Aw sad. Good job. Good story
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Don't give out trouble or it will come back to you - my translation of old proverb
SO SAD.
AWWWWWWWW:((
The words LOL are over used but hey thats a good thing!
This was a sad heart-breaking story. BUT A GOOD ONE!
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That was terrific but really sad. When I read that the girlfriend died, I felt a jolt in my stomach. I didn't cry. I don't know why but I don't cry anymore. Can't even feel a jolt of tears coming. Don't get mad at me for being different! I've had that happen before and din't want you to be that kind of person.
My Gods, look at all the reads!
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Ohhhhhhhh.......... SO SAD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Aww...
Praise the LORD in all he does
THAT"s about the saddest story I EVER read on Kidpub
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Wow, lots of reads.. It wasn't really all that sad that I wanted to bawl and cry. It wasn't tragic or horrible or heartbreaking. But it was sad.
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I personaly liked the main idea of the story!! I think that your word choice and fluency was really good. The only thing that confused me was why the father was doing that to her. But overall, I loved it...even though it is sad
I had a jolt of tears.
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OMG so sad :( !!!!!!!!
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Uhhh...well, I don't know. i didn't think that u added enough punctuation to make the writing clearer; u kinda had a lot of run-on sentences in this story. also, i don't think the content was appropriate
Love,
AudrieLau
Wow, so many reads...
The story is amazing and sad at the same time, but it would be better if it had more detail:D
But overall, it was really good.
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That's terrible! :(
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:/ wow thats so so so sad. I don't cry at reading stuff, like ever, but it made me sad.
Now, as a writer and CCer:
I think it's a good story, plot-wise, but it would be EPIC if you added some more detail and filled it out a bit...
LOVED IT!
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Its sweet how they were a good couple and loved each other but so sad. I wished she reported him or something though!~you know you love me. xoxo
that was realy sad but you need to make it more interesting like explain and describ it was a little boring not trying to be rude but ya a little bit boring
awhhh,
that is such a cute story but so sad <3
It's so sad. I almost cried..
I'm sorry, but I don't see how this is sad.
*Jill*
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