On Poetry and Shoelaces
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Clarissa in the middle of the road, staring at a pretty bird |
September 6th, 2010
A/N: I've been on a poetry high this weekend. Writing poetry. Reading poetry. And here's a poem about poetry. I wrote when I was supposed to be doing my History essay, but that's not the point...
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My English teacher
Was so excited about the poetry unit
That it seemed almost rude of me to laugh at her
Write a poem! She told us. About
Anything! About your shoelaces!
It doesn't matter!
And Alex looks hopefully across the classroom at
Marietta laughs at him and whispers to her seat partner:
Will you look at that.
He just doesn't get it,
Does he?
Alex slinks down in his seat
And I wonder
How someone could write a poem
About their shoelaces
Because some things,
Like feelings,
Mean nothing
And never will...
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By the way, first time i ever used names in a poem. Disclaimer: Alex and Marietta are entirely figments of my imagination.
Clarissa, all your poems are amazing! This one included.
*~Mac~* Whenever I'm about to do something, I think, "Would an idiot do that?" And if they would, I do not do that thing.~ Dwight Schrute
Not bad! :) Some lines just dont fit together though, but you did a good job on it.
~Kay~
Good job! I like how simple it is.
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~*^*Athena*^*~
"A house divided cannot stand."~Abraham Lincoln.
WRITE NOT FIGHT!
Hmm, like what lines? Because now I'm gonna get all OCD until I figure out what to change.
Like
'And Alex looks hopefully across the classroom at
Marietta laughs at him and whispers to her seat partner:'
The two things about that is I dont think you need the 'And' in there and also 'the classroom at Marietta laughs' that line just makes me a little confused :P
Other than that it is REALLY good!
~Kay~
Oh, okay. I actually did that on purpose. It's like two sentences connected--I do it in a lot of my poems, just usually not so conspicuously. The "And" is just there for rhythmic reasons.
But thanks anyway. And do my reasons make any sense? Or do I just sound weird now?
haha - they make sense!
~Kay~
Oh I like it! But even more than the flow and word choice and whatnot, I like the meaning and intent :)
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Shoelaces...you know, I seiriously almost wrote a poem awhile ago regarding shoes/shoelaces. I really love this poem, for it's simplicty and the such. :)
Kiki:(after Red Queen has a hysterical fit of laughter) Am I missing something?
Neina:I think SHE'S missing something... Behold! The WALRUS! It's like a vampire, but better!~Neina