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Tess.....chapter 3 and 4

Tess.....chapter 3 and 4

by Maleah
in California

December 21st, 2011

Tess .....continued
By Maleah Haro
Previously on Tess chapter 1 and 2
Tess little sister wanders off and gets stolen now Tess
wants to get revenge!
Chapter 3 Dangerous Measures

I rushed to my den and gathered all my supplies." Where do you think your going Tess?" said King Charlie. " To find my sister!" I said. "Well don't forget your protecter, pick him up on the bottom floor." said King Charlie. I ignored him and went to the bottom floor to find my protecter. But then I realized if I should go, It was a dangerous measure I had to take. Then I realized again that Tina was my own flesh and blood, and that she was my little sibiling. I loved her and I knew she loved me, I bet she would love even more if I did save her, I had to take my risk and just do it for my Tina!

Chapter 4 Tina is that you

I couldn't find my protecter so I just went alone. Good thing the castle has dirt roads because I could see footprints scattered leading uproad. I sprinted as fast as I could toward the footprints that leaded into the forest. It was 7:30 and it was getting dark. I knew I had to find her fast because in the woods it gets pitch black in there! Then I heard a faint yell. It was coming from a black faded house up ahead. I ran up to the house and saw that the front door was open I floated in. When I walked in the house it was filthy." Tessss!". Said Tina. " Tina is that you?" I said!


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This story is too rushed.

This story is too rushed. Slow it down. Explain what the Kind looks and smells like. Explain the castle. Add details. it'll make it more interesting. Develope the character. We don't know anything about Tess or Tina. Describe them. Show us how witty and cool they are. But right now we don't know: you're the author, you DO know, so tell us.

 

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Posted by (amy) Awry Lives on Wed, 12/21/2011 - 22:27


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