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The World's Waltz

The World's Waltz

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by Ninja Cat
in the depths of Wonderland...trying to find a looking-glass portal out.

August 25th, 2010

The World’s Waltz

On the boundaries

Of the mingling jokes

I stand on the other side

Of the stairs

There is nothing good

To see or do here,

But hey, how about I pull your hand?

It is a horrible, stumbling thing

As they dance atop the alter

Are dulled senses are slowly dazzled

What would it be like?

Here with you?

 

A shrill voice

Echoes all around us

Stinging with the

Worst possible meanings

Within the crowded room,

I catch your gaze

Of course you know,

There’s nothing good here

To see or do,

But come on now let’s

Give it all we’ve got!

 

Sentences filled, with short words

The similar faces,

Reason for confusion

Still searching for,

Searching for something

That I cannot find

Cheeks are red, but eyes are angry

You look away, but still are smiling

Those tiny messages,

Are hard to understand!

 

With a hop, and a step

It’s a horribly stumbling dance

Our own corner of the world

To whisper,

“One, two, three, four.”

One little crash

And I feel the sense of ending

We make a grand entrance

And are gone in the next moment

Twirling, twirling

My heart, it’s beat

Is going ever faster!

 

There’s no room

For the humble passerby

In the race to board

The final train

There is nothing good

To see or do here

But, should I take that hand?

Something’s changing,

In the air

I try to pretend it’s all in my head

A disconnected and stumbling dance

Yes, shall we dance it?

With all our might?

 

What do I do?

What do I say?

Why all this movement?

Why step with the music?

Searching for,

Searching for the reason

But it cannot be found!

Tears are falling, but you’re dancing

Eyes filled with pain, yet you’re moving

That kind of contradiction,

Can’t be understood!

 

With a high and a low,

It’s a horribly screeching song

All around,

The people hang their heads

You can almost hear

The one note that my heart sang

I cannot yet forget it

An amazing view,

From out this tiny window

There’s nothing good

To see or do here

 

With a hop and a step

It’s a horribly stumbling dance

We quietly said,

“One, two, three, four.”

One little crash

And I feel a sense of ending

Slowly surely, you are disappearing

Take me with you

And your unknown journey

Goodbye, farewell

I hope to not return here…


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Awww...wow, the giddy whirl

Awww...wow, the giddy whirl of the world is really captured in this poem! Well done!

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Word domination! You make it sound so unattainable.

~Opal Koboi, Artemis Fowl

Posted by Athena on Wed, 08/25/2010 - 23:31
Thank you, I'm really glad

Thank you, I'm really glad that you comment on all of my poems. It really makes me happy :)

Kiki:(after Red Queen has a hysterical fit of laughter) Am I missing something?

Neina:I think SHE'S missing something...

Posted by Ninja Cat on Thu, 08/26/2010 - 14:27
*claps loudly and

*claps loudly and enthusiastically* Bravo, bravo, encore! I love all your poems, Ninja Cat-san, and I have no idea why. They have a certain je ne sais qui...hmmm. It seems almost as if they were translated from a song in another language--they have this strange musical quality, and there's something really cool going on with the structure and word choice, but I have yet to figure out exactly what... *taps chin thoughtfully*

Posted by Clarissa on Fri, 08/27/2010 - 13:33
That really means a lot

That really means a lot Clarissa, because I think YOUR poetry is so amazing. Thank you for the support!

Kiki:(after Red Queen has a hysterical fit of laughter) Am I missing something?

Neina:I think SHE'S missing something...

Posted by Ninja Cat on Fri, 08/27/2010 - 15:52
I think I may have figured

I think I may have figured it out.

Your poems are...tantalizing, it's like the words are going to fall into rhythm and rhyme, but at the last minute they dance away. Like, when you translate, the words change, but the rhythms are almost there, and it still feels musical, despite the fact that it--infuriatingly--isn't. Your poems mock me. 

And...(yes, I have been track-stalking, how did you guess?) you have such a unique way of wording things, your poems deal with pretty ordinary comparisons, but they are worded in a way that keeps them from seeming trite. And it's funny, because it makes perfect sense, the way you'll say things, and eventually gets me wondering why we don't talk like that. And basically it winds up sounding foreign but idiomatic, at the same time...am I making sense? Somehow I don't think so...

"Like a top, like a plaything, the earth spins around"--Me, from Twisting the World

Posted by Clarissa on Sun, 04/03/2011 - 14:50
I do well with confusing

I do well with confusing stuff, considering my thoughts are a little less glued together than most people's, so that pretty much made sense. XD
I'm considering "re-vamping" this poem because I love it so much, and I have a lot of things and rhythm changes that I want to add to it :)

"OH MY FREAKING GOSH IT'S WILLY WONKA!" ~Me :)

"I think, someday, when you're dead, we're going to disect your brain and--"
"HERE we go..."~Neina and I :D

~Nya?~

Posted by Ninja Cat on Sun, 04/03/2011 - 15:52
Yeah, that's my brain too.

Yeah, that's my brain too. The mental pictures I get from stuff are apparently...different. My creative writing teacher says I live in Clarissaland. Maybe it's a writer thing? :)

"Like a top, like a plaything, the earth spins around"--Me, from Twisting the World

Posted by Clarissa on Sun, 04/03/2011 - 19:12


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