Why me? Comment Please!

by Harry
in Cheshire
January 30th, 2010

My second poem! I wrote this in under ten minutes as well. Please comment!

My sadness is immense

Expansive as the sea

I am lost inside it

Why’d you do this to me?

The fire has been blown out

What we once had has gone

I want to scream and shout.

Everything is undone

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i think its really nice and

i think its really nice and the rhyming fits in really well. NICE

Posted by Holly on Sat, 01/30/2010 - 12:57

good job I like it

Posted by dragonwriter on Sat, 01/30/2010 - 13:44

Great. I totally agree--the

Great. I totally agree--the rhymes do fit really well. Keep on writing poetry!

Posted by Clarissa on Sat, 01/30/2010 - 14:12

I really like it and the

I really like it and the rhymes slot in perfect!

Posted by Holly on Sun, 01/31/2010 - 12:17

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