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Posted February 14th, 2012 by Harley246
CC: You move too fast, and make a new paragraph every time someone new speaks or a new idea comes up. More description and punctuation would be lovely also.
I can't wait to see where this goes! This sound very interesting, it just needs some polishing up a bit. :)
~ If aliens are looking for intelligent life, Earth shouldn't be scared.~ Flat Soda. Just trying to get me breathing again….Oh shit! I wasn’t breathing!~FMD
Great job!!!! Nice detail, and the only mistakes I caught were the paragraph formats but other than that, AMAZING!
Some say the skys the limit. So tell me why there's footprints on the moon?
That was really good!!! I can't wait to see what happens next!!!
nice!i just feel like it reads too fast but I would like to see what is next. There r a few errors with puncuation and paragraphs
Thanks for your comments they really helped me fix some of my work
more editing to come
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