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Day two. Hospital

Day two. Hospital

Posted July 15th, 2017 by mischief

by Lioness
in Mars.

 " Hey, I'm Heather, who are you"?             4/18/1990

She'd just moved in the next bed yesterday night. Without looking up from the book I was reading I grunted, " Ray".  

" I'm fifteen, you"?

Still without looking I mummuled " Fourteen".

" Why are you here"?

" You tell me why your here first".

Without flickierng an eyelash she smiled and said, " Cancer".

" I'm sorry".

  " Oh, it's no so bad. It's not like I'm sacred to die. Plus, my parents and sidlings will vist me while I'm here. How about you"? I shrugged. I realy didn't want to talk about why I was here or wheter or not my parents would vist me. While she was chreefully chatting with the nurse I got a good look at her. Boy, is she pretty. With straight red hair and sprakling green eyes.  

 

                                                                             

 


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Good. It kept me reading

Good. It kept me reading till the end of it. Just make sure that you don't switch between tenses (you went from past tense of saying 'said' to present tense and saying 'boy, is...')

Posted by Elora on Sat, 07/15/2017 - 13:36
Nice job! Update

Nice job! Update soon!

 

 

I hope one day I can love something as much as women in commercials love yogurt.

Posted by Augusta on Sat, 07/15/2017 - 15:50
I like how different Ray and

I like how different Ray and Heather are. For cc, I would suggest describing the room a little more. There's some miss-spelled words. I'll keep reading if you continue writing. 

Posted by Meowing (Emily) on Sun, 07/16/2017 - 14:14

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