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Banshee Dare

Banshee Dare

Posted December 23rd, 2012 by rebecca

A Book Review by Rebec
in Rivendell, the only place in Middle Earth that gets Wi-Fi

Author: 
Maxi
Rating: 
3

Banshees are, of course, one of mythology's darkest figures, and it feels odd to read this book. It could, however, make a reasonable story. It just reads too much like some sort of fact book for some reason. It doesn't feel enough like fiction, which should be a good thing, but in this case it isn't. I'm not entirely sure what to think.

Since there is only a prologue so far, I can hardly make an educated judgement, but from what I have seen, I feel a bit indifferent, sadly, because I love traditional banshee legends. Killing the dinosaurs? Doesn't work for me. I'm not entirely sure whether Wendy is the antagonist or a weird protagonist. There doesn't seem to be much detail on her parts. It reads like fact. Wendy's a girl with weird mismatch eyes, which means she's about to become a banshee. Again, this feels wrong. She doesn't seem overly developed as characters go, and needs a bit more depth to her.

We learn about this new take on banshees, and in fact, the entire premise of this is extremely good, banshees being a fearsome creature. There does need to be more detail, and of course, more chapters.

 

For the author:

Give some depth to Wendy, add more detail to the story, try and write it more like fiction, use a better word than 'exploded' to describe what happened to ears, try and write a better sentence for the ending, research the original banshee myth and continue writing this. Clear some things up, and do some severe edits, and it could easily be a four star story. Oh, and do not use brackets in the story, use a subordinate clause instead.


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Yeah the prologue was crap

Yeah the prologue was crap but I just needed to get some CC for it.
I am definitely editing. Editing is complex but easily important.

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Posted by Max on Sun, 12/23/2012 - 04:33
I'll have to check this out,

I'll have to check this out, because it sounds cool. I love banshees! This is a good book review, Tygress! yes

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Posted by Candy Cane (Abb... on Sun, 12/23/2012 - 10:09

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