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Book Excerpt Review

Book Excerpt Review

Posted June 30th, 2013 by Read_Write

A Book Review by feysand (lydia)
in love with tom holland

Author: 
Garrett
Rating: 
3

Synopsis:

An eight-year-old girl was killed, possibly by murder, possibly by accident. But her journal seems to give the message that some fairies are after her...

Characters:

We have not met any characters yet in this excerpt, therefore I cannot review the characters at this point in time.

Plot:

In this tiny bit of excerpt, I think that this plot may have a good chance at becoming something pretty good. Alas, I do not have enough information to fully review here, either.

Overall:

Overall, I think this excerpt might need a bit of work. There are some grammatical problems, and I think there should be a short sentence before the article, like, "Lying in the attic of the old house, lay an abandoned newspaper." Or, if there is a person reading it (which the last sentence does not indicate), maybe, " He picked up the ____ news and gasped at what had happened." I don't know, it just seemed wrong starting the way it did.

Also, I think you should tell the story of her death before saying what her mom said, etc. But otherwise, I really liked it! It was very intriguing!

This has very good potential, so I shall see what become of it. :)


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