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The Flame Within

The Flame Within

Posted July 24th, 2013 by BriannaH

A Book Review by Abbey
in lost in the world of YA


Rating: 10 out of 10

Gore: No
Romance: No
Cursing: No
Series: I don't know
Would I Recommend It? Definitely yes
Link: http://www.kidpub.com/book-page-or-chapter/my-first-post-untitled-please-read-i-would-greatly-appreciate-it-2182124213

Ash, a sixteen year old girl, is not your average teen. She has been recruited, along with several other girls her age, by an organization of scientists to help her harness her supernatural powers. She has the ability to control fire, a very destructive and dangerous power to hold. She has been trained to fight off any bad experiments created by enemy scientists ever since she was a toddler. But only one thing is on her mind; escaping the jail she is in and getting revenge for her parents death, which, naturally, ocurred by the means of an accidental house fire.Ash of course, believes the fire wasn't so accidental. But when the girls are called to complete their first mission - stopping another group of evil scientists overtaking the world with an army of supernatural kids - Ash is forced to leave her home and live in the factory creating the army. Along the way she makes a few unexpected friends, and finds out even more unexpected secrets about her past.

Originality: Really good
Characters: Very fleshed out and realistic
Description: Amazing, but in some areas there's a bit of an overload
Suspense: Good
Action: Great

Errors - 
Grammatical: N/A
Spelling: Some - most of them are typos (not talking about the British spellings) but a few mixed up homophones
Punctuation: N/A
Capitalization: One or two

To Work On: 
-Fix the spelling errors
-Make sure you don't go overboard when describing

Overall - 
I absolutely LOVE this book. Keep writing, Tygerblossum!!

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Ohmygosh ABBEY THANKYOU SO MUCH!! *squeezes you really tight* This is just what I needed. You seriously made my day!! :DD

(Oh, and I know about the description XD I seriously need to stop. And yes, I will go back and fix the spelling errors! I blame NaNoWriMo -_-)

Again, thanyou thankyou thankyou thankyou!!! This made my day :3 Thanks so much for all the positive ratings you :3

All it takes is a spark...

Posted by Tygerblossum on Thu, 07/25/2013 - 01:25
Thanks! I'm glad it helped.

Thanks! I'm glad it helped. I look forward to reading more!! :)

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Posted by Pineapple Balle... on Thu, 07/25/2013 - 11:20

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