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Word Vomit

Word Vomit

Posted January 5th, 2013 by rebecca

A Book Review by Rebec
in Rivendell, the only place in Middle Earth that gets Wi-Fi

Author: 
Maxi
Rating: 
5

A short story of any form could be at least paragraphed, but otherwise, it is amazing. Because it is different, so radically different from anything I have reviewed previously, I am rocking back and forth in the corner working out how to structure this so it is just the same as all my other interviews.

This is, naturally, impossible. It's a short story, and this paragraph, which used to be the protagonist paragraph is irrelevent, because there is none. No protagonist, just a continuous voice, and a narration that is possible first person. I could excuse the brackets if they fitted with this narration, but it is so mysterious and enigmatic that really, who needs brackets here? Use a subordinate clause. 

It is about villains, and heroes, the motivations of the two. It is a dark piece, that deserves a decent title, but I suppose imagination can only stretch so far. This was utter genius. I cannot begin to described my thoughts on this. It is by far the writer's best piece. 

I gave it five because it captures the imagination. It utterly deserved that.

 

For the writer (see - I can't say author now because it isn't a book. You ruined my entire structure):

Paragraph it, and use subordinate clauses to keep the style constant. Also, write books like this, because this is your best piece yet.


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Oh it sounds really good

Oh it sounds really good :)

You have two hands, one for helping yourself and another for helping others.

Posted by Twilight Sparkle on Sat, 01/05/2013 - 11:23
*narrows eyes* What do you

*narrows eyes*

What do you want? 

XD

 

I was going to do something humorous, thought-provoking and fascinating for my signature, but whyever would I do that when I can drive you all insane with something like this?

Posted by Quetzalcoatlus ... on Sat, 01/05/2013 - 12:56
Can you send me a link or

Can you send me a link or something?

~Moonbeam~ ~Check out my Hunger Games FanFic!~ http://www.kidpub.com/book-page-or-chapter/forty-third-annual-hunger-gam...

Posted by Moonbeam (stella) on Sat, 01/05/2013 - 13:33
TheĀ  piece is directly

The  piece is directly below this review :D

~A daughter is stolen by the Monastery, sent to live in a place where she will never again see the daylight. But she's different...and determined to find out how to overthrow the Deedwriter and bring back her enslaved parents...Have You Heard?

Posted by Epicness (Laura) on Sat, 01/05/2013 - 19:26

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