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Old 07-05-2013, 06:25 PM
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YESHYESHYEHYEYRQF8UYHEWUGHUTWGHTURY
this will be amazing.
WE CAN BE GENIUS BUDDIES BECAUSE THAT WHOLE DEATH-LIFE KID THING IS EEEPPPPYYYYKKKKKK.
Okaysies, so will they have kids in the second book?
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Old 07-05-2013, 06:27 PM
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Okaysies, so will they have kids in the second book?
Sounds good. Maybe those kid's aging should be uber-sped-up, so that they're fighting age very quickly. OwO
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Old 07-05-2013, 06:31 PM
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YAY! I can come back on! SO...
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Sounds good. Maybe those kid's aging should be uber-sped-up, so that they're fighting age very quickly. OwO
Yep. That sounds good.
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Old 07-05-2013, 06:38 PM
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Yep. That sounds good.
Yaysies! I can't wait for the first chappie n_n
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Old 07-05-2013, 06:40 PM
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Question: What tense are we doing? (I'm used to doing present but I don't care) And for the first chapter its basically introducing the MC and Ivory and Adrianna going to Apprenticeship...?
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Yaysies! I can't wait for the first chappie n_n
I'm going to start on it now.
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Old 07-05-2013, 06:43 PM
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I'm going to start on it now.
Yaysies!

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Old 07-05-2013, 07:09 PM
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Sometimes, I forget who I really am. I pity myself so much; I completely block out reality. It feels so good to just sit outside and stare at the stars, letting everything fly away on the cool breeze. I feel good there. I feel, real.

But then the stars start to make faces and my dad starts screaming in my face. And then reality comes back and slaps me in the face.

~

That's the opening. It stinks, but I thought you might want to see it.
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Old 07-05-2013, 07:11 PM
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Sometimes, I forget who I really am. I pity myself so much; I completely block out reality. It feels so good to just sit outside and stare at the stars, letting everything fly away on the cool breeze. I feel good there. I feel, real.

But then the stars start to make faces and my dad starts screaming in my face. And then reality comes back and slaps me in the face.

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That's the opening. It stinks, but I thought you might want to see it.
I like it! But in that last paragraph, you overuse the word "face" a bit.
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