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Old 05-22-2014, 03:29 PM
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Working on it... will post here as soon as finished.
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Old 05-22-2014, 03:30 PM
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Thank you so much! Now I can do the second one if you want.
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Old 05-22-2014, 03:44 PM
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Thank you so much! Now I can do the second one if you want.
OK, cool with me.
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Old 05-22-2014, 04:02 PM
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This good?

“Luna dear, I don’t think it is a good idea for you to go up into the surface world” Luna’s dad, the king of the mere-people, said worried.
“Fatha, please may I, I think it would be good for me” Luna said in reply, her thick Australian accent ringing through her bed-cavern.
“No, I said no and that’s final” Luna’s dad said, hand resting on the silver chrome handle of Lunas teal door, ready to walk out.
“It would teach me to never do somethin’ crazy again’’ Luna says, face blank.
Her father, turning around, says “Fine”, sighing. So arrangements ware made for Luna to get schooling on the surface world.
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Old 05-22-2014, 04:04 PM
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This good?

“Luna dear, I don’t think it is a good idea for you to go up into the surface world” Luna’s dad, the king of the mere-people, said worried.
“Fatha, please may I, I think it would be good for me” Luna said in reply, her thick Australian accent ringing through her bed-cavern.
“No, I said no and that’s final” Luna’s dad said, hand resting on the silver chrome handle of Lunas teal door, ready to walk out.
“It would teach me to never do somethin’ crazy again’’ Luna says, face blank.
Her father, turning around, says “Fine”, sighing. So arrangements ware made for Luna to get schooling on the surface world.
Awesome. But I think we could start with the protagonist? Because she literally starts everything in her point of view, and Luna would be more mysterious if we meet her a little later.
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Old 05-22-2014, 04:14 PM
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Awesome. But I think we could start with the protagonist? Because she literally starts everything in her point of view, and Luna would be more mysterious if we meet her a little later.
Yeah, I think the same thing. Just I do not feel super-confident using Mixie, I want to see someone write her first because I do not want to mess her up....
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Old 05-22-2014, 05:13 PM
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I'll try.

"Mo-om!" Mixie whined. "Why are we even moving? I have a life here!"
"Mixie, sweetie, your father got a new job at the electric company in the new town and we want to be there for him," her mom replied gently.
"But I don't want to leave!"
"Fine, then. You can live with your grandfather Tommy here."
"No!" Mixie shuddered. Grandpa Tommy always made fun of her in front of her friends, earning giggles about Mixie.
"Then do you want to come with us?" Mixie's mom asked teasingly, knowing her secret dislike for Grandpa Tommy.
"Fine."

Sorry it's short. I'm bored.
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Old 05-22-2014, 07:54 PM
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I'll try.

"Mo-om!" Mixie whined. "Why are we even moving? I have a life here!"
"Mixie, sweetie, your father got a new job at the electric company in the new town and we want to be there for him," her mom replied gently.
"But I don't want to leave!"
"Fine, then. You can live with your grandfather Tommy here."
"No!" Mixie shuddered. Grandpa Tommy always made fun of her in front of her friends, earning giggles about Mixie.
"Then do you want to come with us?" Mixie's mom asked teasingly, knowing her secret dislike for Grandpa Tommy.
"Fine."

Sorry it's short. I'm bored.
That's Ok, good job...
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Old 05-22-2014, 07:57 PM
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That's Ok, good job...
Mm not very good.
:P rushed thing because I had to finish my art.
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Old 06-01-2014, 01:04 PM
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Sorry I haven't been on here in a week or two. I can write the next paragraph if you want?
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