Winners and Runners-Up KidPub February 2013 Writing Contest
Posted March 20th, 2013 by perryd
The Febraury 2013 writing contest looked for the killer first paragraph...the one that screams READ THE REST! to the unsuspecting person holding the book. While every single entry had us on the edge of our chair, here are three openers that the KidPub judges wished had, as Paul Harvey loved to say, the rest of the story...
Winner, $50 Amazon Gift Card: Bubbles
As a foreign scream escapes my throat, and a tear blurs my vision I don't let go. I can't let go. As our eyes meet, hers filled with fear and defeat, mine persistence. Her nails dig into my skin and I feel it rip apart slowly. My eyes leave hers and stare down into the pit of darkness. Her fate. Her prophecy I am keeping her from. Screams of death and pain crawl into my ears. My grip lessens as their alluring persuasive voices seduce me. She cries my name. But its only a mumble in my hears. Louder she screams in pain my eyes meet hers sweat surrounds her face and blood leaks from her wrist. Tears clog my eyes, not leaving. Just there. And like a huge weight they escape my eyes and hit her face. She screams one last time. A scream of her prophecy being fulfilled. I open my mouth. But no noise leaves. It doesn't dare to. For fear. As her sweat loosens my grip and the blood travels down her arm touching her face. I smile. I smile because that is all I can do. I can't frown. Because that will bring more sorrow than what should be. So I smile, as one last tear escapes my eye. And she smiles as she lets go of my hand. And is engulfed by the darkness that forever awaited her.
Runner-up under 12, $25 Amazon Gift Card: BriannaH
My father, Nico Swan, lurked in the shadows beneath the tree I was hiding in, waiting for me to come down. I knew he was there, for he didn't know how to fully hide himself. However, he was very good at acting, and he often used this talent to get to know others and then kill them. My father wouldn't have ever gotten caught, had I not reported him each time. Now, he's here to get his revenge for all seven times I got him arrested. By killing me.
Runner-up 12 and older, $25 Amazon Gift Card: Ember
The wind danced across the field, rippling the grass waves. For a moment, the city was silent in the gloom, and nothing could disturb it. A lone girl stood in the grass, feeling their gentle stalks grasping at her ankles. Her hair swirled in the laughter of the wind, brilliant blue eyes ablaze with a gentle fire. It was all for her, and for a moment, the world was hers. She was free.
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Those are sooooo good *O*
Read Ena/TDC and Ian/Turtle's book, The Dark Calligrapher: http://www.kidpub.com/book-page-or-chapter/dark-calligrapher-prologue-19...
Wow, I won! Although how do I claim my gift card? Want to have your book reviewed? Click here --> http://www.kidpub.com/book-page-or-chapter/me-myself-and-book-reviews-17...
Did you write the winner one! Cuz it was amazing!
XOX,
AudrieLau
Wow, these are amazing...
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LIVE reverse it boldly. . . this is me. Deal with it.
*_* All of these are amazing.
Congratulations, guys!
~I didn't fall. I attacked the floor. Backwards. 'Cause I'm a ninja.~
~*~LENA~*~
Wow!!! Congrats, guys!
~A daughter is stolen by the Monastery, sent to live in a place where she will never again see the daylight. But she's different...and determined to find out how to overthrow the Deedwriter and bring back her enslaved parents...Have You Heard?
Congrats, everyone! :D Those entries were all simply amazing.
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"The whisper was right...they forgot about her." —Heroes of Our Generation, by Kendra
I WON FIRST PLACE... SO HAPPY.. THANKS YOU GUYS
- Danielle "I think everybody's nuts." - Johnny Depp
I only like the last one. The other ones are disgusting! You guys like them? Get a life!
WTF?
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I tried to catch some fog. I mist.
What are you talking about? You know how mean that is
I don't mean to be mean. But you want to read stuff that talk about blood and gore and people being killed?
But sorry, I was too harsh. Really I'm sorry if I hurt your feelings, it's just...well, I feel sorry for you.
Sorry.
You know was writers do ? Make up stuff. Read my pieces most of them are happy. Writers put themselves in someone else's shoes. If your areal writer thn you would understand that and not be jealous of people winning but you didn't. Seriously stop criticizing people thats just rude. Improve on your own wrirting before you can get to judge other people. And in case you didn't know, it's called creativity.. everyone who won has some, don't be upset that you don't.
- Danielle "I think everybody's nuts." - Johnny Depp
That's really rude! These people worked really hard and I wish I could do something as great as they did.
Sorry, I didn't mean to be harsh. I was in an odd mood.
You know, that's really mean. You can make the other authors feel bad.
Sorry... I do weird things sometimes. I was tired.
Geez guys, lay off! I see her point of view.... Good and creepy at the same time. I don't want to read the HG for that exact reason.- Panthera tigris tigris (Grace) Love dragons? Read this! http://www.kidpub.com/book-page-or-chapter/legacy-fire-book-1-prophecy-f...
If you have nothing nice to say keep it to yourself.
- Danielle "I think everybody's nuts." - Johnny Depp
When will the March contest results be posted?
when will the APRIL contests be posted?
I know, right? They are already 19 days late. Sheesh!
BTW, the winning entries are awesome!!!!
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Please check out Life Against Death: http://goo.gl/p7R7q
Awesome book covers... http://goo.gl/m9CnY
~~Lydia~~
"Un telligente celebro sabe mas... Spanish. A brilliant mind knows a lot." ~Me and some others... in reading class, trying to write a play.
-_- It is MAY and the MARCH results have not been posted!!! ~I'm not afraid of imaginary things.~
._. iwantmyresults
iwantmyresults
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Please check out Life Against Death: http://goo.gl/p7R7q
Awesome book covers... http://goo.gl/m9CnY
~~Lydia~~
"Un telligente celebro sabe mas... Spanish. A brilliant mind knows a lot." ~Me and some others... in reading class, trying to write a play.
Did you enter? ~I'm not afraid of imaginary things.~
Yeah. Did you?
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Please check out Life Against Death: http://goo.gl/p7R7q
Awesome book covers... http://goo.gl/m9CnY
~~Lydia~~
"Un telligente celebro sabe mas... Spanish. A brilliant mind knows a lot." ~Me and some others... in reading class, trying to write a play.
Yup.
~I'm not afraid of imaginary things.~
That's a hilarious quote!
Who's quote is hilarious?
“It does not do to dwell on dreams and forget to live.” - J.K. Rowling
The 'I'm not afraid of imaginary things' quote
"Perhaps we could throw him back?" -Reepicheep (Narnia: Voyage Of the Dawn Treader)
OMG THESE ARE AMAZING! Btw Sam i luv ur quote.
^_^ GO J.K. ROWLING^_^
My book is neat. My book is interesting. My book is the best book I have ever read. My book is beautifully written.
Still no March results. D:
~I'm not afraid of imaginary things.~
"... Come to the dark side. We have stories." ~Arin in the comments of my bio
D: It's almost June. JUNE.
I don't think they're ever gonna be posted. :'(
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Please check out Life Against Death: http://goo.gl/p7R7q A
wesome book covers... http://goo.gl/m9CnY
~~Lydia~~
"Un telligente celebro sabe mas... Spanish. A brilliant mind knows a lot." ~Me and some others... in reading class, trying to write a play.
Maybe not...o-o.
The one time I enter the thing, the results don't get posted! D~:<
~I'm not afraid of imaginary things.~
"... Come to the dark side. We have stories." ~Arin in the comments of my bio
What happened to the monthly contest? Seriously, this is getting annoying. How manytimes has thjis happpened> *counts on fingers*
5 teenagers, 1 bad guy, countless souls stolen.- Read Stolen Souls- http://www.kidpub.com/book-page-or-chapter/untitled-prologue-please-comm...
Iz my b-day, IT BETTER BE POSTED TODAY.