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Winners and Runners-Up KidPub February 2013 Writing Contest

Winners and Runners-Up KidPub February 2013 Writing Contest

Posted March 20th, 2013 by perryd

 

The Febraury 2013 writing contest looked for the killer first paragraph...the one that screams READ THE REST! to the unsuspecting person holding the book. While every single entry had us on the edge of our chair, here are three openers that the KidPub judges wished had, as Paul Harvey loved to say, the rest of the story...

Winner, $50 Amazon Gift Card: Bubbles

As a foreign scream escapes my throat, and a tear blurs my vision I don't let go. I can't let go. As our eyes meet, hers filled with fear and defeat, mine persistence. Her nails dig into my skin and I feel it rip apart slowly. My eyes leave hers and stare down into the pit of darkness. Her fate. Her prophecy I am keeping her from. Screams of death and pain crawl into my ears. My grip lessens as their alluring persuasive voices seduce me. She cries my name. But its only a mumble in my hears. Louder she screams in pain my eyes meet hers sweat surrounds her face and blood leaks from her wrist. Tears clog my eyes, not leaving. Just there. And like a huge weight they escape my eyes and hit her face. She screams one last time. A scream of her prophecy being fulfilled. I open my mouth. But no noise leaves. It doesn't dare to. For fear. As her sweat loosens my grip and the blood travels down her arm touching her face. I smile. I smile because that is all I can do. I can't frown. Because that will bring more sorrow than what should be. So I smile, as one last tear escapes my eye. And she smiles as she lets go of my hand. And is engulfed by the darkness that forever awaited her.

 

Runner-up under 12, $25 Amazon Gift Card: BriannaH

My father, Nico Swan, lurked in the shadows beneath the tree I was hiding in, waiting for me to come down. I knew he was there, for he didn't know how to fully hide himself. However, he was very good at acting, and he often used this talent to get to know others and then kill them. My father wouldn't have ever gotten caught, had I not reported him each time. Now, he's here to get his revenge for all seven times I got him arrested. By killing me.

 

Runner-up 12 and older, $25 Amazon Gift Card: Ember

The wind danced across the field, rippling the grass waves. For a moment, the city was silent in the gloom, and nothing could disturb it. A lone girl stood in the grass, feeling their gentle stalks grasping at her ankles. Her hair swirled in the laughter of the wind, brilliant blue eyes ablaze with a gentle fire. It was all for her, and for a moment, the world was hers. She was free.

 
Those are sooooo good

Those are sooooo good *O*

 

Read Ena/TDC and Ian/Turtle's book, The Dark Calligrapher: http://www.kidpub.com/book-page-or-chapter/dark-calligrapher-prologue-19...

Posted by ~~Calla~~ on Wed, 03/20/2013 - 18:02
Wow, I won! Although how do

Wow, I won! Although how do I claim my gift card?                            Want to have your book reviewed? Click here --> http://www.kidpub.com/book-page-or-chapter/me-myself-and-book-reviews-17...

Posted by BriannaH on Wed, 03/20/2013 - 21:41
Did you write the winner

Did you write the winner one! Cuz it was amazing!

XOX,
AudrieLau

Posted by Audrie on Sat, 03/23/2013 - 16:20
Wow, these are

Wow, these are amazing...

_______
LIVE reverse it boldly. . . this is me. Deal with it.

Posted by [~TDC & Turtle~] on Wed, 03/20/2013 - 18:22
*_* All of these are

*_* All of these are amazing.

Congratulations, guys!

 

~I didn't fall. I attacked the floor. Backwards. 'Cause I'm a ninja.~

~*~LENA~*~

Posted by City Lights {Lena} on Wed, 03/20/2013 - 18:26
Wow!!! Congrats, guys! ~A

Wow!!! Congrats, guys!

~A daughter is stolen by the Monastery, sent to live in a place where she will never again see the daylight. But she's different...and determined to find out how to overthrow the Deedwriter and bring back her enslaved parents...Have You Heard?

Posted by Epicness (Laura) on Wed, 03/20/2013 - 19:16
Congrats, everyone! :D Those

Congrats, everyone! :D Those entries were all simply amazing.

~~~

"The whisper was right...they forgot about her." —Heroes of Our Generation, by Kendra

Posted by TheAshWolf on Wed, 03/20/2013 - 19:56
I WON FIRST PLACE... SO

I WON FIRST PLACE... SO HAPPY.. THANKS YOU GUYS

 

- Danielle "I think everybody's nuts." - Johnny Depp

Posted by Danielle on Mon, 03/25/2013 - 12:58
I only like the last one.

I only like the last one. The other ones are disgusting! You guys like them? Get a life!

Posted by Kate on Thu, 04/11/2013 - 14:30
WTF? ________ I tried to

WTF?
________
I tried to catch some fog. I mist.

Posted by To Be Unseen (T... on Thu, 04/11/2013 - 17:02
What are you talking about?

What are you talking about? You know how mean that is

Posted by Epicness (Laura) on Thu, 04/11/2013 - 18:56
I don't mean to be mean. But

I don't mean to be mean. But you want to read stuff that talk about blood and gore and people being killed?

But sorry, I was too harsh. Really I'm sorry if I hurt your feelings, it's just...well, I feel sorry for you.

Sorry.

Posted by Kate on Fri, 04/19/2013 - 17:19
You know was writers do ?

You know was writers do ? Make up stuff.  Read my pieces most of them are happy. Writers put themselves in someone else's shoes. If your  areal writer thn you would understand that and not be jealous of people winning but you didn't. Seriously stop criticizing people thats just rude. Improve on your own wrirting before you can get to judge other people. And in case you didn't know, it's called creativity.. everyone who won has some, don't be upset that you don't.

 

- Danielle "I think everybody's nuts." - Johnny Depp

Posted by Danielle on Sat, 07/27/2013 - 10:32
That's really rude! These

That's really rude! These people worked really hard and I wish I could do something as great as they did.

Posted by Amanda on Fri, 04/19/2013 - 12:02
Sorry, I didn't mean to be

Sorry, I didn't mean to be harsh. I was in an odd mood.

Posted by Kate on Fri, 04/19/2013 - 17:20
You know, that's really

You know, that's really mean. You can make the other authors feel bad.

Posted by Kayleigh on Sat, 04/27/2013 - 06:23
Sorry... I do weird things

Sorry... I do weird things sometimes. I was tired.

Posted by Kate on Tue, 05/14/2013 - 13:08
Geez guys, lay off! I see

Geez guys, lay off! I see her point of view.... Good and creepy at the same time. I don't want to read the HG for that exact reason.- Panthera tigris tigris (Grace) Love dragons? Read this! http://www.kidpub.com/book-page-or-chapter/legacy-fire-book-1-prophecy-f...

Posted by Panthera on Tue, 06/04/2013 - 15:54
If you have nothing nice to

If you have nothing nice to say keep it to yourself.

 

- Danielle "I think everybody's nuts." - Johnny Depp

Posted by Danielle on Sat, 07/27/2013 - 10:28
When will the March contest

When will the March contest results be posted?

Posted by To Be Unseen (T... on Tue, 04/23/2013 - 16:16
when will the APRIL contests

when will the APRIL contests be posted?

Posted by Kayleigh on Sat, 04/27/2013 - 06:24
I know, right? They are

I know, right? They are already 19 days late. Sheesh!

BTW, the winning entries are awesome!!!!

 

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Awesome book covers... http://goo.gl/m9CnY

~~Lydia~~

"Un telligente celebro sabe mas... Spanish. A brilliant mind knows a lot." ~Me and some others... in reading class, trying to write a play.

Posted by Invisible (Lydia) on Sun, 04/28/2013 - 22:28
-_- It is MAY and the MARCH

-_- It is MAY and the MARCH results have not been posted!!!                                                                                                                                         ~I'm not afraid of imaginary things.~

Posted by Pythagoras (TDC... on Thu, 05/02/2013 - 17:39
._. iwantmyresults

._. iwantmyresults

Posted by Ultimate Insani... on Tue, 05/07/2013 - 16:57
iwantmyresults   ----- Pleas

iwantmyresults

 

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Please check out Life Against Death: http://goo.gl/p7R7q

Awesome book covers... http://goo.gl/m9CnY

~~Lydia~~

"Un telligente celebro sabe mas... Spanish. A brilliant mind knows a lot." ~Me and some others... in reading class, trying to write a play.

Posted by Invisible (Lydia) on Tue, 05/07/2013 - 17:19
Did you

Did you enter?                                                                                                                                                                                        ~I'm not afraid of imaginary things.~

Posted by SilverMoon on Tue, 05/07/2013 - 17:33
Yeah. Did

Yeah. Did you?

 

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Please check out Life Against Death: http://goo.gl/p7R7q

Awesome book covers... http://goo.gl/m9CnY

~~Lydia~~

"Un telligente celebro sabe mas... Spanish. A brilliant mind knows a lot." ~Me and some others... in reading class, trying to write a play.

Posted by Invisible (Lydia) on Tue, 05/07/2013 - 18:08
Yup. ~I'm not afraid of

Yup.

~I'm not afraid of imaginary things.~

Posted by Ultimate Insani... on Tue, 05/07/2013 - 18:19
That's a hilarious quote!

That's a hilarious quote!

Posted by Kate on Tue, 05/14/2013 - 13:09
Who's quote is

Who's quote is hilarious?

 

“It does not do to dwell on dreams and forget to live.” - J.K. Rowling

Posted by Sam on Mon, 05/20/2013 - 15:09
The 'I'm not afraid of

The 'I'm not afraid of imaginary things' quote

 

"Perhaps we could throw him back?" -Reepicheep (Narnia: Voyage Of the Dawn Treader)

Posted by Kate on Wed, 06/19/2013 - 16:30
OMG THESE ARE AMAZING! Btw

OMG THESE ARE AMAZING! Btw Sam i luv ur quote.
^_^ GO J.K. ROWLING^_^

My book is neat. My book is interesting. My book is the best book I have ever read. My book is beautifully written.

Posted by Camryn on Sat, 10/19/2013 - 18:07
Still no March results. D:

Still no March results. D:

~I'm not afraid of imaginary things.~

"... Come to the dark side. We have stories." ~Arin in the comments of my bio

Posted by Into Darkness (... on Sat, 05/25/2013 - 21:11
D: It's almost June. JUNE. I

D: It's almost June. JUNE.

I don't think they're ever gonna be posted. :'(

 

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Please check out Life Against Death: http://goo.gl/p7R7q A

wesome book covers... http://goo.gl/m9CnY

~~Lydia~~

"Un telligente celebro sabe mas... Spanish. A brilliant mind knows a lot." ~Me and some others... in reading class, trying to write a play.

Posted by Invisible (Lydia) on Sat, 05/25/2013 - 23:09
Maybe not...o-o.

Maybe not...o-o.

Posted by Epicness (Laura) on Mon, 05/27/2013 - 20:28
The one time I enter the

The one time I enter the thing, the results don't get posted! D~:<

~I'm not afraid of imaginary things.~

"... Come to the dark side. We have stories." ~Arin in the comments of my bio

Posted by Into Darkness (... on Tue, 05/28/2013 - 21:56
What happened to the monthly

What happened to the monthly contest? Seriously, this is getting annoying. How manytimes has thjis happpened> *counts on fingers*

5 teenagers, 1 bad guy, countless souls stolen.- Read Stolen Souls- http://www.kidpub.com/book-page-or-chapter/untitled-prologue-please-comm...

Posted by SoulSeeker (Con... on Fri, 05/31/2013 - 14:58
Iz my b-day, IT BETTER BE

Iz my b-day, IT BETTER BE POSTED TODAY.

Posted by Birthday (TDC &... on Fri, 05/31/2013 - 16:30

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