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Colors

Colors

Posted March 26th, 2020 by Wolfpup_Angel

by Wolfpup_Angel
in Florida

March 26th, 2020

                        Colors:

 

 

There's red; the color bleeding through the satin

sheets as the crimson color takes over.  

                    

There's orange; just taste that sweet, juicy

color and watch as it takes over

ones mouth, sending down sweet sensations of joy.

 

There's yellow; the color of joy, happiness, and

nice just spreading around the world every-single

minute....

 

There's green; watch as new plant life is born

and spread around the planet..But let one ignite

and watch life crumble ito unforgiving, smoldering flames

 

There's blue; watch as the deep, rich color takes ahold of our world

and spread across a canvas of sorrow

 

There's purple; this velvet royal color is of prestigous fancy

and is never looked down upon

 

There's pink; the color of love!, one might say. For this color is fragile, 

and can unleash the true meaning of destruction

 

There's white; so powerful like a beautiful angel, but

yet so powerless and weak with a touch of delicacy

 

Lastly, the most darkest of all ; black. Sorrowful, merciless, name

it all you want, but it will always have it's way of an negative perspective.

The color of ones soul when it has endured through enough pain and can finally say:

I'm used to it....

 

 

 

                                                                                          By: Wolfpup_ Angel

 

                      *I'll be discontinuing the bitten chronicles and come up

                   with a better story series. For here are some words of gratitude,

                                       AVE ATQUE VALE.........*

 

 


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Pretty  Is this suppost to

Pretty 

Is this suppost to be a poem???

Posted by Fire Dragon 74 on Thu, 03/26/2020 - 16:42
I love this concept. Your

I love this concept. Your take on the colors taps into their stereotypes without being bound by them.

-many of your semicolons could be replaced by periods, possibly to better effect?

-the format got weird in the yellow stanza. also you do not need a dash between the words every and single

-in the green stanza, did you mean to put a period between planet and But? or did you mean to put a ... ? If you meant the second, But does not need to be capitalized.

-in the white stanza, there's a paradox that could use a few more words of explanation, or at least an acknowledgement that it is a paradox? A thing cannot be both powerful and powerless at the same moment. Does the angel change? Or is it powerful in some ways and powerless in others? 

-in the black stanza, ones should be one's

That's all I got. 

Again, I loved your poem!! Happy writing!

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Spero quod via tua est directa et quod tuum onus est levis.

Posted by Tía Snow on Sun, 03/29/2020 - 11:52
Hello , this is one of

Hello , this is one of the few times I will reply to someone who read my story or poem. I wrote this in a hurry and didn’t bother to revise my work -of which I should’ve done. Here are answers to your questions:
1.- I will try this method of advice.
2.- Again, I did not care to revise my writing as I was in a hurry to get this in.
3.- I only did what I did for effect, but if you insist that I do this I will try.
4.- I believe that the color white is powerful and powerless at the same time. Hear me out. An angel is a very fascinating creature that radiates a lot of power. But an angel is a very fragile creature too, like a baby with soft skin for example.This is what I meant to describe in the stanza. iIf you think this is a paradox, I am totally fine with it.
5.-Sorry about the “one’s”. Again, was in a hurry.
Thank you for reading this and I will as well thank you for reading my poem and giving words of encouragement! Good day and stay safe!

AVE. ATQUE. VALE,

Wolfpup_Angel

Posted by Wolfpup_Angel on Sun, 03/29/2020 - 15:13
*sniff* it’s been so long

*sniff* it’s been so long since someone acknowledged my advice! Thank you!

To answer your question on Lelin’s post, yes! I am a senior in high school and 18 years old. I hope that doesn’t make me too intimidating, lol. I’ve always thought that intermediate/middle schoolers are capable of more complete thought and art than they’re usually given credit for.
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Spero quod via tua est directa et quod tuum onus est levis.

Posted by Tía Snow on Sun, 03/29/2020 - 16:05

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