Colors
Posted March 26th, 2020 by Wolfpup_Angel
in Florida
March 26th, 2020
Colors:
There's red; the color bleeding through the satin
sheets as the crimson color takes over.
There's orange; just taste that sweet, juicy
color and watch as it takes over
ones mouth, sending down sweet sensations of joy.
There's yellow; the color of joy, happiness, and
nice just spreading around the world every-single
minute....
There's green; watch as new plant life is born
and spread around the planet..But let one ignite
and watch life crumble ito unforgiving, smoldering flames
There's blue; watch as the deep, rich color takes ahold of our world
and spread across a canvas of sorrow
There's purple; this velvet royal color is of prestigous fancy
and is never looked down upon
There's pink; the color of love!, one might say. For this color is fragile,
and can unleash the true meaning of destruction
There's white; so powerful like a beautiful angel, but
yet so powerless and weak with a touch of delicacy
Lastly, the most darkest of all ; black. Sorrowful, merciless, name
it all you want, but it will always have it's way of an negative perspective.
The color of ones soul when it has endured through enough pain and can finally say:
I'm used to it....
By: Wolfpup_ Angel
*I'll be discontinuing the bitten chronicles and come up
with a better story series. For here are some words of gratitude,
AVE ATQUE VALE.........*
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Pretty
Is this suppost to be a poem???
I love this concept. Your take on the colors taps into their stereotypes without being bound by them.
-many of your semicolons could be replaced by periods, possibly to better effect?
-the format got weird in the yellow stanza. also you do not need a dash between the words every and single
-in the green stanza, did you mean to put a period between planet and But? or did you mean to put a ... ? If you meant the second, But does not need to be capitalized.
-in the white stanza, there's a paradox that could use a few more words of explanation, or at least an acknowledgement that it is a paradox? A thing cannot be both powerful and powerless at the same moment. Does the angel change? Or is it powerful in some ways and powerless in others?
-in the black stanza, ones should be one's
That's all I got.
Again, I loved your poem!! Happy writing!
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Spero quod via tua est directa et quod tuum onus est levis.
Hello , this is one of the few times I will reply to someone who read my story or poem. I wrote this in a hurry and didn’t bother to revise my work -of which I should’ve done. Here are answers to your questions:
1.- I will try this method of advice.
2.- Again, I did not care to revise my writing as I was in a hurry to get this in.
3.- I only did what I did for effect, but if you insist that I do this I will try.
4.- I believe that the color white is powerful and powerless at the same time. Hear me out. An angel is a very fascinating creature that radiates a lot of power. But an angel is a very fragile creature too, like a baby with soft skin for example.This is what I meant to describe in the stanza. iIf you think this is a paradox, I am totally fine with it.
5.-Sorry about the “one’s”. Again, was in a hurry.
Thank you for reading this and I will as well thank you for reading my poem and giving words of encouragement! Good day and stay safe!
AVE. ATQUE. VALE,
Wolfpup_Angel
*sniff* it’s been so long since someone acknowledged my advice! Thank you!
To answer your question on Lelin’s post, yes! I am a senior in high school and 18 years old. I hope that doesn’t make me too intimidating, lol. I’ve always thought that intermediate/middle schoolers are capable of more complete thought and art than they’re usually given credit for.
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Spero quod via tua est directa et quod tuum onus est levis.