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to a star and his court of planets

to a star and his court of planets

Posted March 20th, 2016 by SilverMoon

by Ens
in timately acquainted with the void

March 20th, 2016

you are a star;;
everyone says that's so impressive
calling you their sun,
their centerpiece
and they, the planets, revolve around you
but they're only mindless followers
pulled in by your gravity.
there are a hundred billion stars in this galaxy alone--
if the unwavering orbit of the planets around you
makes you feel as if you're special
you should try thinking for a change.
you are bright and young and magnetic
you are the largest object in this solar system
burning with a passion i cannot even begin to understand
but you are simply a dwarf,
hardly uncommon in luminosity or temperature
and hardly enough to become a giant
you will expand eventually but eventually too,
you will waste away for lack of fuel.
but if you are far from special,
then what does that make me?
the planets ignore me and
i'm insignificant to a central star such as yourself
even if your absolute magnitude is hardly notable
your apparent magnitude makes you
the brightest object in our sky
whereas i am too boring and inconsequential
to even warrant a place in your sky
in this metaphor.
i am nothing with a magnitude
i am nothing.
but i aim to be the dark sky itself
because what does any star matter,
there is no space without me
the sun and the planets are but brief specks of light
you are one solar system and i am all space
with the emptiness in my eyes and my soul
but the vastness of my being
i will swallow you all.


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wow. like wow that's.

wow. like wow that's. wow.

it's really well written ena i don't know what to say otherwise

Posted by echo entinity (... on Sun, 03/20/2016 - 07:24
thanks :) ///kintsukuroi///

thanks :)

///kintsukuroi///

Posted by Kintsukuroi (Ena) on Sun, 03/20/2016 - 10:13
The passion and ambition in

The passion and ambition in this poem is compelling. 

I love the way you write. 

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Spero quod via tua est directa et quod tuum onus est levis.

Posted by *Snow* dunadaneth on Sun, 03/20/2016 - 09:21
thanks :) ///kintsukuroi///

thanks :)

///kintsukuroi///

Posted by Kintsukuroi (Ena) on Sun, 03/20/2016 - 10:13
Hey! This is a great poem! I

Hey! This is a great poem! I love great poems!

This really is very nice- I love how you melded science and poetry together to create this. It takes quite a bit of thought to write something, period, and even more to use other facets of our universe in the poem.

Very well done!

And about the whole username thing, it's entirely okay. Easy mistake. All is forgiven, even though there really wasn't anything to forgive. ;)

Posted by TheColorofBoom{... on Sun, 03/20/2016 - 19:54
Thanks! Also about the

Thanks!

Also about the username thing, thank you so much!!! I got so pissed and I'm so sorryy!! Thank you :)

///kintsukuroi///

Posted by Kintsukuroi (Ena) on Sun, 03/20/2016 - 20:31
I wrote out a nice comment

I wrote out a nice comment but then I didn't post it before I favorited this because I'm a ditz /sigh/. I shall attempt to recreate my comment

I really love the description here so much, the word choice and comparisons are so well done. The title and theme match so well and I find that admirable, especially for poetry, because titling is difficult. I very much enjoyed the poem, and I think the message interesting. I also find the lack of caps and second person point of view fit very well stylistically for this poem.

I don't write a lot of poetry, so I don't think any cc I'd have would be particularly helpful, if I could think of anything to cc.

 

Art is the weapon. Imagination the ammunition. Stay strong, and stay dirty. Create and destroy as you see fit. * ~|*I*|~*

Posted by otaku on Sun, 12/04/2016 - 20:49
tysm~ {we either find a way

tysm~

{we either find a way or we make one.}

Posted by e.s.b. on Sun, 12/04/2016 - 21:19
so good! i love the

so good! i love the metaphors behind this, and the beautiful words. 

i especially love the last line "i will swallow you all"

:)

Posted by Garrett on Mon, 12/05/2016 - 16:00
tsym :) {we either find a

tsym :)

{we either find a way
or we make one.}

Posted by e.s.b. on Mon, 12/05/2016 - 16:03

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