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The Whale Hunters

The Whale Hunters

Posted February 28th, 2021 by EmilyRocks_9

by BestBunnies101
in Wisconsin

February 28th, 2021

One day Jon’s father took Jon whale hunting. The whale hunting took longer than Jon thought. When they cot a whale suddenly the whale jerked forwarded ripping a big hole in the bout then it sunk. The end.

Moral: greed is not good


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The ending is ubrupt, and I

The ending is ubrupt, and I don't think the moral fits well. Other then that, It is good

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It's not just a matter of trusting yourself but testing your abilities - Joseph Sugarman

Posted by Ryoko on Sun, 02/28/2021 - 15:03
I have some spelling

I have some spelling corrections for you, if you want them! 

Right now you have: "When they cot a whale" 

It should be: "When they caught a whale"

"Cot" is a small bed. "Caught" is the past tense of catch.

You have: "the whale jerked forwarded" 

It should be: "The whale jerked forward." 

"forwarded" is what you do with emails. "forward" is a direction in which things can move.

Right now you have "a big hole in the bout" 

It should be: "a big hole in the boat"

"bout" is a kind of small fight. "boat" is the vehicle on the water. 

Good yard,

(Warmest regards)

Snow

Posted by Tía Snow on Mon, 03/01/2021 - 20:43
The story is good, but make

The story is good, but make sure to watch out for your spelling like Snow said.

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It's not just a matter of trusting yourself but testing your abilities - Joseph Sugarman

Posted by Ryoko on Tue, 03/02/2021 - 11:40

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